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Here Is Where I Cross... by ~discarded-youth:icondiscarded-youth:





Thinking hard and throwing up
Letting the pain go straight to my veins
You've come to my conclusion
I'm better off dead
So work your fingers into my bones
I can't hate you or this
I've tried once or twice
Odd how my voice fades from you
Here is where you break my legs
So I will never run away
What a waste of time
I'd never have left you anyway
Here is where I cross my fingers
Pray you'll say what I want to hear
"You're the best girl I've met this year"
©2004-2009 ~discarded-youth
:icondiscarded-youth:

Author's Comments

Once again, title don't fit....

Here Is Where I Cross My Fingers

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:icontrexce:
I've gotta say... I'm really bad at analyzing poetry, and even worse at critiquing. But, yeah, hey, I like your stuff.
:icondiscarded-youth:
Thanks. That's all I'd want. No need to analyze or critique as long as you like it! :D

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Coordinate brain to mouth then ask me what it's like to have myself so figured out...

...wish I knew...
:iconnoloveinfear:
this is a really good poem, I feel the same way about someone sometimes, so great poem.
:icondiscarded-youth:
Thanks much!

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Coordinate brain to mouth then ask me what it's like to have myself so figured out...

...wish I knew...
:iconendofeternity:
Amazing dear... "You've come to my conclusion" --- if only...

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"And then I stabbed him in the eye with a pencil!"
:icondiscarded-youth:
Thanks.

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Coordinate brain to mouth then ask me what it's like to have myself so figured out...

...wish I knew...
:iconpeachy-punkgirl:
fav

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trying to fit in, born to stand out!
:icondiscarded-youth:
Thanks. *thumbs up*

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Coordinate brain to mouth then ask me what it's like to have myself so figured out...

...wish I knew...
:iconblueeyes16:
Hey...I think I like this one the best so far. Seriously, the imagery in this is great...the disjointed thoughts, and then the couplet at the end is amazing. My favorite part:

Here is where you break my legs
So I will never run away.

Niiiice.

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And it symbolizes something
Although you don't know what it is
Like loneliness or
Longing for a
Future perfect kiss

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